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MAFIA INDEBTED (Mafia Series 1)

MAFIA INDEBTED (Mafia Series 1)

MAFIA INDEBTED (Mafia Series 1)

  • Author: First Published: 2018-06-13
  • Genres: Modern Reads: 132448
  • Words: 300375 Status: Ongoing
  • Score: 4.7 (89)

DARK ROMANCE (Private story) "Don't please," she sobbed, shaking badly. The fear of her situation was slowly sinking in. "Please let me go, I want to go home." She cried. He smirked and cupped her face. She immediately stiffened upon his touch and stared into his Smokey grey eyes. "You are home, tara, this is your home now, by my side." He spoke firmly. She saw the determi...

DARK ROMANCE (Private story) "Don't please," she sobbed, shaking badly. The fear of her situation was slowly sinking in. "Please let me go, I want to go home." She cried. He smirked and cupped her face. She immediately stiffened upon his touch and stared into his Smokey grey eyes. "You are home, tara, this is your home now, by my side." He spoke firmly. She saw the determi...

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2019/4/19 13:32:30

You are a good writer however you have the habit of repeating an act that is already been put to an end. You made your readers’ mind go haywire by prolonging the characters convo and repeating something that it should be put to finish because it was opened already in the prior chapter. I know that the story was made with a connection to psychological and mental problems and how you will deal it base on different mindset and strength of all the characters in your story. You made it like in real life happenings but sad to say it became redundant and unpleasant to the eyes of your readers. But all in all you are a good writer - it just that you have the habit of prolonging the agony so it will extend and lengthen your chapters but not the real essence of your story. 🧐🤔🙂

Shaheen

Shaheen: You see, when I was writing this book, my first readers had difficulty in understanding because of the suspense. Unlike here, you have all the chapters and you can read in a flow However when I was writing this book, it took me 8 months with a chapter update every week or so. At that time, Due to the prolonging time, my readers used to get confused about the issues so I adopted the habit of repeating certain scenarios and even after the story was finished, people were still confused despite the repitions. So yeah, I don’t see how it’s redundant.

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2019/10/8 23:19:10

Omg im so angry with this woman she have a dead brain

Jeremy: 15037190434

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2019/11/6 3:47:27

I love love the story💕💕💕 Please write more story like this

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2019/10/9 2:34:17

💕💕💕💕

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2019/10/8 22:56:29

Omg this woman so annoying 😡😡😡

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2019/10/8 1:11:27

I love love your books please continue writing💕💕💕💕

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4 2019/9/25 17:24:39

♥️♥️♥️

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5 2019/9/21 18:29:36

love the story..it's the best

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2019/8/31 12:54:09

so expensive it's chapters but worth it♥️♥️

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5 2019/8/6 17:39:22

it so good story

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